Thursday, June 16, 2011

Beautiful

It's time again to play with the girls from the Red Dress Club!

This week's prompt is about physical beauty and how it can open (or close) doors.

I honestly didn't take my time with this one. I just threw something together because I want to get back into the habit of participating. So it's really not edited and I'm sure I could make it infinitely better with a bit more attention, but, as always, I'm open to feedback.


April reached for her glass of water, sipping carefully through the straw. She didn't want to smudge her lipstick, after all.

He was talking about something. His job? His relationship with his mother? 

She didn't know. She'd lost track, her mind instead focusing on the blond curls that played at his ears, drawing attention to impossibly high cheek bones and a perfect jawline. His eyes were a shade of blue she'd never seen before. They were the color of the sky on a particularly vivid and cloudless day. 

He was the most beautiful man she had ever seen.

She raked her fingers through her brown hair. Every trace of curl had vanished before she'd even reached the restaurant. And she was certain the pimple that had been threatening to appear on her chin had finally reared its ugly head. She laughed at something he said, using the moment as an excuse to cover her mouth, hiding the teeth that desperately needed braces. She tried to laugh with her mouth closed, but knew that just made her face look weird.

What had she been thinking? She'd seen the pictures on his profile. She knew he was far more attractive when she accepted this date. And yet she'd agreed to meet him. 

He was nice. Polite. Friendly. If he was arrogant, he was doing a fine job of hiding it.

But it was obvious to April in those initial few minutes. This was never going to work.

12 comments:

Valerie said...

For something you just threw together-this is pretty terrific writing!
This poor girl-it looks like insecurity and self doubt have reared their ugly heads once again-they will ruin her chance for true love more than a million crooked teeth:)

lindsayfield said...

This is soooooo what I did with Hubby haha (minus the blond curls)
I figured that a man THIS good looking would NEVER be with someone like me...
Great job!!

vinobaby said...

Agh--we've all had moments like this. You are taking me back to the world of dating, the insecurities--don't want to go there. Great job for something you just threw together.

Cheers.
VB

Carrie said...

her insecurity is heartbreaking. He saw her picture too. Maybe he sees past what she sees as flaws.

I hope April gives him a chance. I think he might actually ditch her more for being inattentive and distracted than not physically attractive.

visiting from RDC

Jennee said...

ahh the story of my life....except I go on dates with ugly insecure men! haha. great writing!

Writerly Wanna Be said...

Glad to see someone trying to get back in the habit of posting...and if this is thrown together, I can't wait to see more.
One thing confused me...blonde curls, and brown hair?
At first I thought she was very secure and disinterested, and then you threw in the twist...very interesting. Look forward to seeing more from you.

Galit Breen said...

i adore a good love story and so hope this one plays out!

I liked how concise you were and how easily the piece flowed between descriptions and inner thoughts.

Ashley said...

Definitely pretty great writing for just throwing something out there. Lol. Love the ending. She's too self conscious and he's too pretty. It's great! Love it!

May said...

I would be curious to see where you might take this next...to see if her gut reaction turns out to be correct. He seems engaged enough that something might happen, but would she sabotage it????? Tune in tomorrow........maybe?

Mandyland said...

I love how she closed the door without even letting it open enough to see who he IS.

Renee said...

You are going on with this story, right?
Well done for "thrown together".
Love the description of him and her insecurities.

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